Not tired of being mad,
Far from happily insane,
Too depressed to feel the pain.
No body cares if you are good,
Nor does it matter if you lose your childhood,
Pleasure is all they need,
Even if your heart if filled with greed.
"Just keep going" they say,
They don't mind even if its not your way,
Walk an unknown path even if you have to crawl,
What ever happens; they say don't fall.
Live a life which you don't want,
The world will race you to the finishing point,
But your dreams are long lost,
And all you did is listen to them at your own cost.
But our lives only end up in our hands,
We shall only play our own bands,
Just trust it in yourself,
Forget every other trickster elf,
Take it just as far as you can,
Be proud, on your own legs you ran.
"Just To Dream, How My Life Turned Out To Be; Hence"
Another one of my tributes Wish I could propose a toast!
I wrote this poem 2 years ago when I felt as expressed in this piece, It just came out naturally, I didn't know if I wanted Respire or Inspire Now I just want to spread the word, to children who have felt the same way know that they are not alone. My main message is:
Have you ever felt neglected of thoughts? Despised for being a dreamer? Torn from your desires? Maybe by some one close to you........
Maybe they meant it for your own good maybe not, If you are indecisive of choosing two paths - One path that leads to your own will and destiny, Its a rough one but its the road you want to take - The other is the path that might give you Fame and fortune but is not really your goal. Being forced to take the wrong ride and live a life which you never wanted is horrendously sad. By heart It takes you no where but to the moment of your last breath to think "If only I had taken the other turn!"
We need to learn to stand up to the offenders, make them understand what being ourself is about and do as we believe. Your path might be full of difficulties but the content that it is your way is what matters the most, which gives you the strength to over throw these obstacles.
Obviously this poem comes with experience of mine which I do not want to share
But I hope this work may bring a little hope into others
But if you don't mind please take a few seconds to post it on the Facebook or Tumblr or Your Blog or Anywhere you want to you have my full permission to do so as long as you credit the author or put my name in the description
Remember this is only to spread hope and help
Thank you a million for your support
Thank you soo much
I'm glad you like it and it helped you a little a bit in you're direction. Good Luck!
The three stanzas divide the poem well, they work nicely for the progression of the piece, but as I mentioned before, the forced rhyme in places does work against you, and the thought behind the work gets a little muddled. Clearly this is a personal poem, but since you put it in the critique folder for :iconWrites-Extrodinaire: I'm critiquing it from a technically angle.
All in all I like the message behind this, I have a lot of friends who have been in similar positions when deciding where to take their lives.
This reminds me of some of the stuff I write, it caught my attention right away. And I can totally relate to this, a lot of the poems I write have the have the same theme.
I think you did a great job and I'm interested in seeing more of your work. I'll give a look to the rest of your gallery when I have a little more time. Until then, keep up the good work!